58.你的偶像是谁?你崇拜谁?下表是腾飞中学一些学生的回答,假如你是该校的一位学生,请根据下表的文字提示

(三十一)【2020•鄂州市】
58.你的偶像是谁?你崇拜谁?下表是腾飞中学一些学生的回答,假如你是该校的一位学生,请根据下表的文字提示,谈谈你校同学的偶像观,并适当发表自己的观点。写一篇英语短文。
过去的偶像:歌星、影视明星 1.明星有酷的发型和服饰,他们很时尚;
2.他们有天赋,会表演有趣的节目;
3.他们的表演让人放松,让我们的生活丰富多彩。
如今的偶像:科学家、医护人员等 1.科学家发明高科技产品来保卫国家安全,提高人们的生活水平;
2.医生和护士拯救人们的生命,帮助人们摆脱痛苦,恢复健康;
3.当国家和人民处于困境时,他们用智慧,勇气、辛勤的工作来帮助人们。
你的观点 那些在危难中帮助我们的人们更值得我们尊重和崇拜,作为学生的我们……
 
要求:1.80-100词。(开头的首句已给出,不计算在词数内)
2.文中不能出现自己的姓名和所在学校的名称及其它相关信息,否则,不予评分。
参考词汇:idol 偶像   fashionable时尚的  wisdom 智慧   respect  尊重
Last week, our school did a survey about “Who is your idol?”. Here are our answers. In the past, we_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
【写作思路】
这篇短文要求学生们根据题目中给出的表格,谈一谈学生们的偶像观,并发表自己的看法。审题可知,这篇短文的主要内容应包括三个方面:首先是同学们过去所崇拜的偶像;然后介绍现在同学们的偶像;最后发表自己的看法。表格中有非常详细的内容提示,这些也是学生们组织文章内容的依据和提纲,注意要将表格中所有内容都包括在内,可以适当拓展,补充一些细节,但不能遗漏要点。短文应以第一人称、一般现在时和一般过去时为主来叙述。
【参考范文】
Last week, our school did a survey about “Who is your idol?”. Here are our answers.
In the past, we thought singers and movie stars were our idols. They always have cool hairs and clothes. They are fashionable. Also, they are talented and can put on funny shows. Their performances are so relaxing that it makes our life colorful. But now we think scientists and medical workers are our idols. Scientists invent high-tech products to protect national security and improve people’s living standard. Doctors and nurses save people’s lives and help them get out of pain and back to health. When our country and people are in trouble, they help people with wisdom, courage and hard work.
In my opinion, those who help us when we are in need deserve our respect and admiration. As students, we should learn from them and study hard to be a useful person to the country and society.
【名师点评】
这是一篇优秀的作文。首先短文内容丰富、完整,结构清晰。短文采取三段式结构,每段的主题都非常明确。理由充分、合理。其次短文中使用了正确的时态和人称,语法规范,用词准确。句式结构完整,符合英语的表达习惯。短文中用到了简单句、并列句、状语从句、定语从句、非谓语动词等多种句式和结构,表达流畅,意思连贯。
高分亮点:
短语:put on;get out of;in trouble;in need;in my opinion。
句型:Their performances are so relaxing that it makes our life colorful.;Scientists invent high-tech products to protect national security and improve people’s living standard.;When our country and people are in trouble, they help people with wisdom, courage and hard work.;In my opinion, those who help us when we are in need deserve our respect and admiration.。
 
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