71.父母是我们最亲的人,但我们有时会在与父母沟通时遇到困难。请根据所给思维导图的提示,以"How to Communicate with Our Parents"为题用英语写一篇

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IX. 书面表达
71.父母是我们最亲的人,但我们有时会在与父母沟通时遇到困难。请根据所给思维导图的提示,以"How to Communicate with Our Parents"为题用英语写一篇短文,谈谈与父母沟通的技巧和做法。
要求:
1.文中需包含思维导图中的主要内容;
2.句子及篇章结构准确、连贯、书写规范;
3.需做适量拓展;
4.词数:80词左右。(标题和第一段已给出,不计入总词数;无需抄写在答题卡对应作答区域)

 

How to Communicate with Our Parents
Communication with parents is one of the first things we have done since we were born. As we grow older, we'll find it's not easy to communicate with our parents openly and effectively. So what should we do when communicating with them? Here are some of my ideas.
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写作思路
这篇作文要求以How to Communicate with Our Parents“怎样和我们的父母交流”为题,用英语写一篇短文,谈谈与父母沟通的技巧和做法。题目中给出了一个思维导图,学生们写作前,应先仔细观察思维导图,明确图中展示的内容以及文章的结构,然后组织语言,并对细节进行适当拓展,用正确的英语表达出来。审题可知,这篇短文应用一般现在时态、第一人称叙述。
参考范文
How to Communicate with Our Parents
Communication with parents is one of the first things we have done since we were borm. As we grow older, we'll find it's not easy to communicate with our parents openly and effectively. So what should we do when communicating with them? Here are some of my ideas.
Firstly, we can make a list of things our parents and we disagree about most. Try to find out the reason why we disagree with each other. Accept each other's ideas little by little. If we still have disagreements, we'd better not get too angry. Secondly, we should talk with them more! Sharing ideas can make us closer. Besides, we should also learn how to really listen. Listening is a skill that must be learned and practiced. Finally, be sure to be polite. We are a family in which everyone is loved and cared for.

【名师点评】
例文点评:这是一篇优秀的作文。首先短文内容完整,包括了题目中要求的所有信息,没有遗漏要点。结构清晰,短文第一段是题目中给出的,然后作者写了一段,这一段中用了比较好的词体现文章的层次,如Firstly, Secondly, Besides和Finally,条理清晰,而且上下文衔接比较紧密。其次短文中使用了正确的时态和人称,语法规范,用词准确。句式结构完整,符合英语表达习惯。除简单句外,短文中还使用了状语从句、定语从句等复合句以及非谓语动词、祈使句等结构。整篇文章表达流畅,意思连贯。
高分亮点:
短语:make a list of;find out;disagree with;little by little;be sure;care for。
句型:why引导的定语从句;If引导的条件状语从句;动名词作主语;that引导定语从句;in which引导定语从句;祈使句;一般现在时的被动语态。

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