On Sunday, Nicholas, a teenager, went skiing with his father at Sugarloaf Mountain in Maine.

第二节 读后续写(满分25分)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
   On Sunday, Nicholas, a teenager, went skiing with his father at Sugarloaf Mountain in Maine.
   They had a wonderful day and decided to drive home to Massachusetts after a final run. They took a chairlift to the top of the mountain, where they split up to go down in different trails. When the father finished his run, he headed to the parking lot to wait for his son. However, Nicholas never showed up.
   It turned out that a fierce snowstorm had swept into the area as Nicholas was on his way down. Unable to see far, he accidentally turned off the path and ventured down the west side of the mountain. Before he knew it, Nicholas was lost and all alone. His way back to the ski trails was blocked. What’s worse, he didn’t have any food or water with him, let alone his cell phone or other supplies. The sun began to sink and he was getting colder by the minute.
   Nicholas had no idea where he was. He tried not to panic. He thought about Bear Grylls’ survival show Man vs. Wild that he used to watch on TV. In the show, Grylls is abandoned in a wild area and has to help himself out. It was time to put the tips he had learned to use.
   He decided to stop moving around. He needed the energy, and the winds weren’t as strong in the valley where he stood as they were up on the mountain. Plus, there was a better chance of someone finding him if he stayed put. The first thing he did was to seek shelter from the freezing wind and snow. Using his skis, Nicholas built a snow cave. He gathered a huge mass of snow and dug out a hole in the middle. Then he piled branches on top of himself, like a blanket, to stay as warm as he could.
   When evening came, Nicholas was really hungry. He ate some snow and drank some water from nearby stream so that he wouldn’t dehydrate (脱水). Then he returned to his cave and slept.
 
Paragraph 1:
   When Nicholas didn’t show up, his father realized there must be something wrong. ____________ __________________________________________________________________________________
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Paragraph 2:
   The next day, Nicholas heard the sound of a snowmobile(雪地电动车). _____________________
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注意: 1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好。
第二节 读后续写(满分25)
写作指导:
Step one审题  
Para.1  根据首句提示可知尼古拉斯没有出现,父亲意识到发生了something wrong,然后要求接下去描述,按照合理的思维,接下去比较合理的描写内容是:
•父亲 反应 (feelings)—担心,害怕 (fear/fright)
      行动(action) —求助(who)—根据chairlift(登山吊椅),finish his run(滑雪或其他运动的道)ski trail (滑雪道)推测这是一个度假胜地,可以向搜寻队(rescue team)或the police求助
不建议续写的内容:
1. 自己找;开车回家找家人;村民帮助搜寻
2. 因天不好,救援滞后或知道儿子有自救技能,不着急,第二天再找(不合常理,生命至上)
 
•求助对象的反应(action)—安慰父亲(comfort)— 立即行动 (成立救援队)
•搜寻环境的描写(搜索未果;风雪交加;时间紧迫)
•搜寻结果(in vain),但是没有放弃搜寻【增加剧情的跌宕起伏】
 
不建议的续写内容:
直升飞机     与下文无衔接,与下文的雪地电动车衔接不畅
Step two
Para.2  当尼古拉斯听到the sound of a snowmobile,
(1) 他的feeling (excited);
(2) 他的action ---   冲出cave                   ---  相遇后的反应 ---  喜极而泣
                  引起注意(声音;物体;动作等)                  紧紧拥抱
 
One possible version:
   When Nicholas didn’t show up, his father realized there must be something wrong. A flush of fear came over him. He could do nothing but ask the police for help. The policemen comforted him and gathered a rescue team immediately to look for the missing teenager. They searched the mountain over the night, but in vain. With the clock ticking, the possibility of Nicholas’ survival would become small. Although the weather condition was poor and the wind was still fierce, they didn’t give up hope of finding him alive. The team split up and decided to expand their searching area.
   The next day, Nicholas heard the sound of a snowmobile.(雪地电动车) Realizing that people had come to his rescue, Nicholas was very excited. He went out of the cave quickly and shouted with all his might(力气). He even ran following the sound, and sure enough, he met face to face with the rescue team soon. At the sight of Nicholas, his father rushed forward and hugged him tightly, with tears in his eyes. All the people present felt relieved and happy at their reunion.
 
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