请根据你对下面这幅图的理解,以“ what do grandparents expect?”为题,用英语写一篇150字的作文。


第1步:审题
体裁:议论文
时态:根据提示,时态应为一般现在时。
内容安排:
1.仔细观察,抓住图画关键点,描述图画,引出问题。
2. 结合实际谈感想。
3.得出结论。
第2步:列提纲
……How lonely and disappointed the old couple are feeling!(图画所体现的问题)
what old people like them expect from their children and grandchildren is love(谈感想)
The picture reminds me that……(结合实际进一步阐述)
In a word, however busy may be, we should ……(得出结论)
第三步:补充细节
根据提示词和关键词(组)进行遣词造句,注意一致和时态问题。
注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接和过渡,书写一定要规范清晰。最后润色修改。
【亮点点击】
此篇范文对图画部分描述切中要害,清楚的描述了故事的发生时间、地点、人物事件。举例部分提到了我和父母,从而证明强调了多陪伴老人的重要性,所以内容分析透彻合理,逻辑强。文章还使用了很多高级表达,如经典短语:rather than,  together with,  in a word,  in return for;非谓语结构:“The grandparents have prepared a big dinner for the family reunion, only to find themselves alone at the table with the gifts from the children on the chairs.”以及“Considering the sacrifices they made for us, we should act in return for them.”;主语从句:“what old people like them expect from their children and grandchildren is love rather than material stuff.”;等。这些表达和句式运用也让文章增色不少。

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