假如你叫李军,你家于2017年被列为“精准扶贫”的帮扶对象。在政府两年时间的帮扶下,你家变化巨大。

(三十四)【2019 •广元】
假如你叫李军,你家于2017年被列为“精准扶贫”的帮扶对象。在政府两年时间的帮扶下,你家变化巨大。时值学校校报举办“家的变化”主题征文活动,请你根据以下内容要点,用英语写一篇70词左右的短文,参加本次活动。
内容要点:
过去 1. 家庭贫困,房屋破旧。
2. 母亲生病,为母担忧,成绩下滑。
现在 3. 住进新房,母亲康复,学习进步。
4. 生活日趋改善。
要求:1. 词数:70词左右。短文开头语已给出,但不计入总词数。
      2. 短文中必须包括所有要点,但不要逐词翻译,可适当发挥。
      3. 短文中不得出现真实的人名和校名。
My name is Li Jun. Thanks to the government, my family has changed a lot in the last two years. __________
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写作思路
本题要求把过去的家乡和现在进行比较,得出现在变得更好的结论。描述过去的状况,要用一般过去时;描述现在的变化,要用现在完成时态。介绍自己家乡的变化,用第一人称。
参考范文
My name is Li Jun. Thanks to the government, my family has changed a lot in the last two years. My family used to be very poor and we lived in an old and broken house. What’s more, my mother wasn’t in good health and she often fell ill. I was worried about her all the time, so my grades dropped. However, with the help of the government, we have moved into a new house. To our joy, my mother has become better. As for me, I have made great progress at school because of my hard work. All in all, our life has gradually improved.

【名师点评】
短文第一句“My family used to be very poor and we lived in an old and broken house.”运用固定搭配“used to do”描述过去的家乡条件不好。下一句用短语“what’s more”(而且)表示语气递进;短语“fall ill”(生病),介绍过去健康状况不好。当比较现在时,用副词“however”(然而)。短语“to our joy”(令我高兴的是)和“as for me”(对我来说),作者结合亲身感受,介绍了身边的变化。最后用“all in all”(总而言之)进行总结,得出结论,即家乡的变化很大。
 
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