随着年龄的增长,你周围的事物也发生了很大变化。请根据以下提示,以“Great changes around me”为题,写一篇短文。

(五)【2019 •湖北省孝感市】
随着年龄的增长,你周围的事物也发生了很大变化。请根据以下提示,以“Great changes around me”为题,写一篇短文。
写作要点:
1. 过去,道路狭窄(narrow),房屋老旧,空气……河水……
2. 现在。路面洁净、宽阔, 交通便利;高楼林立;蓝天白云, 满城绿树鲜花, 小鸟歌唱;人们……
3. 感受……
写作要求:
1. 要点齐全,省略号处须作适当发挥,但不要逐句翻译;
2. 语句连贯,条理清晰,详略得当,书写工整;
3. 文中不得出现任何宾实的信息(地名、校名和人名等);
4. 100词左右,短文的题目和开头已给出,不计入总词数。
Great Changes around Me
In the past few years, great changes have taken place around me. ___________________________________
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参考范文
Great Changes around Me
In the past few years, great changes have taken place around me. The roads used to be narrow and crowded. The houses were old and small. The air wasn't fresh enough. Sometimes, there was terrible smell. The river was polluted badly and there was rubbish in it.
Nowadays, the roads are wide and clean. It's really convenient for people to go out. We can choose different kinds of transportation to go anywhere. Lots of tall buildings have been built in the city. Most of us have moved to big beautiful houses. The sky is blue and the cloud is white .The birds are singing happily. My hometown looks like a big garden with green trees, grass and colorful flowers.
Our country is rich and strong, we are living a happy life. I'm sure as time goes on, our life will become better and better!

【名师点评】
这篇短文使用了大量的固定句式和短语,为文章增色不少,如take place,around me,used to be,convenient for,go out,different kinds of,lots of,most of us,look like,live a happy life,go on,become better and better等。而固定句型It's really convenient for people to go out.和固定句型The river was polluted badly and there was rubbish in it.以及I'm sure as time goes on, our life will become better and better!等复杂从句结构的运用,丰富了短文内容,使表达多样化,是本文的亮点。在学习中注意总结牢记一些固定句式及短语,写作时就可以适当引用,使文章表达更有逻辑性,也更富有条理。
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