The canteen was crowded with summer campers from high schools across the city, all extremely

3.阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
The canteen was crowded with summer campers from high schools across the city, all extremely hungry after a day's activities. I spotted an empty place and walked there. Just as I put my tray(餐盘) down, I felt a bump against my hip. The tray dropped on the table and the soup spilt all over my camp shirt and jeans. And I heard a burst of laughter.
"Can’t you look where you are going, you clumsy fool!" I shouted, glaring at the troublemaker, a tall boy with wild hair.
"Sorry! Can't help laughing! You look so funny!" said the boy, bending over with laughter. I was too annoyed to respond and just walked away to change my clothes.
The next morning, we were all assembled for roll call(点名), when I saw the same boy come running out of the dorm, his unbuttoned shirt flying behind him. Before he could slide into place, he was spotted by the Camp Commandant. As a punishment for being late, he was made to do a hundred pushups. As I walked past him later, I let out a loud laugh, saying "Sorry. I can't help laughing. You look so funny."
So the war of words continued in the following three days with the wild-haired boy, whose name, I found out, was Ben.
A mountain hike(远足) marked the last day of the camp. On the way back, I found myself left far behind my team. Soon, they were out of sight. The camp site was a long way away and I was getting anxious as evening fell. I risked taking a shortcut(近路) clung to the mountain side, but suddenly, I tripped off the path and slid right down the slope(斜坡).
Fortunately, my fall was stopped by a bunch of bamboo. I saw I was about ten meters below the track. There was no way I could climb up the slope as evidently I had my ankle broken. After making several vain attempts, I waited hopelessly. It got dark and I became afraid.
注意:
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1:
Then, I saw a faint light, and heard a voice calling out my name.
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The next day, as we were boarding the buses which would take us back to our own homes, Ben came up to me.
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【答案】Paragraph 1:
Then, I saw a faint light, and heard a voice calling out my name. I started screaming out loud for help, but my voice sounds so weak down from the slope. Scared and exhausted, I couldn’t help thinking that maybe the campers wouldn't find me and I would die alone in the mountain. Finally, I heard "there he is." I'm saved, thank God! I told them that I had hurt my ankle, and they helped me slowly back to the camp. The next day I was going home for treatment.
Paragraph 2:
The next day, as we were boarding the buses which would take us back to our own homes, Ben came up to me. He said, "this isn’t funny at all. I hope you get better soon." “Thank you, I hope we can be friends from now on.”I said. So the battle between me and the wild-haired boy was over, and Ben and I became good friends.
【分析】
这是一篇读后续写作文。
【详解】
通过阅读所给文章可知,作者在夏令营时遇到了一个头发蓬乱的高个子男孩Ben,总是说作者滑稽,和作者作对。直到在最后一天作者在登山时不小心滑下山坡,摔断了脚踝。
续写部分分为两段,第一段开头是:然后,我看到微弱的灯光,听到一个声音在叫我的名字。所以后文应该是讲述作者获救的过程;第二段开头是:第二天,当我们准备上车回家时,Ben向我走来。本段应该写作者和Ben最后的结局是成为了朋友,结束了他们之间的“战争”。
续写时要求使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语增加了写作难度,我们要熟悉所给划线词语,恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右;续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。按要求完成写作任务。
【点睛】
本文描写详略得当,使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如:exhausted(筋疲力尽的),couldn’t help doing(忍不住做某事)等高级词汇;宾语从句Scared and exhausted, I couldn’t help thinking that maybe the campers wouldn't find me and I would die alone in the mountain.;并列句So the battle between me and the wild-haired boy was over, and Ben and I became good friends.等高级句式。
 
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