（二十三）【2020 •山西省】
十、书面表达 请将短文写在答题卡相应的位置上。

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教育就是善意的干预。在我们的成长过程中时常会面对来自父母或老师的提醒与批评，有的同学不理解，有的甚至会有过激的反应。如何客观、冷静地对待这种问题，需要我们认真、理性地思考，并做出合理应对，这正是教育要达到的目的。
请针对以上现象，结合生活中的经历，写一篇短文。
内容包括：
1. Your opinion about this phenomenon (现象)
2. An experience you had/heard/saw
3. What you have learned from it
要求：
1. 词数不少于80词；
2. 参考词汇仅供参考；
3. 文中不得出现真实的人名、校名。

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【写作思路】
这是一篇材料作文。要求针对我们成长过程中，面对来自父母或老师的提醒与批评，有的同学不理解，有的甚至会有过激的反应这一现象，结合生活中的经历，写一篇短文，短文要求包含对这一现象的感想，自己所看或所听到的事情，从中学到的道理。
【参考范文】
As far as I'm concerned, it is of great importance to stay calm and reasonable when our parents and teachers blame or criticize us, which is beneficial for our lifelong development.
I still remember the day that I had an English class. Seeing Li Ming falling asleep, our teacher, Miss Hu, woke him up and reminded him to listen to her carefully. To my surprise, Li Ming rushed out of the classroom without permission. It was so impolite and rude to do so. Later, I talked with him and he realized that the teacher expected to help him develop a good habit and he wasn't so calm at that time. Therefore, he picked up his courage and said sorry to Miss Hu in front of the whole class.
It's a good idea to keep calm and think about it for a moment whenever being blamed or criticized. Sometimes a small change of yourself may lead to a big difference to your life.
【名师点评】
例文点评：例文包含了所有要点，主要以第一、三人称为主，用一般现在时和一般过去时来写，在讲述自己所见所闻的事情时用一般过去时；内容包含三部分：第一部分开篇点题，谈出了自己对这一现象的看法；第二部分讲述自己所见所闻的事情；第三部分讲了自己从中学到了什么。本文时态使用正确，表达有条理，语句通顺，意思连贯，使用了一些固定句式。
高分亮点：
短语：of great importance；be beneficial for；fall asleep；wake sb up；to one’s surprise；without permission；develop a good habit；pick up one’s courage；say sorry to sb；in front of；the whole class；lead to。
句型：①方式状语从句、时间状语从句 As far as I'm concerned, it is of great importance to stay calm and reasonable when our parents and teachers blame or criticize us.
②定语从句 I still remember the day that I had an English class.
③宾语从句 he realized that the teacher expected to help him develop a good habit.